I was pleased to receive some positive & encouraging feedback including constructive help about writing. I will in future use subheadings while I write and then delete them to make sure I cover everything I want to say and try to have a more cohesive, in-depth examination of the ideas I’m looking at and having. I suppose the problem with this is I often don’t know what I want to say until I’ve started writing – I’ll have some mental bullet points and ideas but as I write I work it out. Saying that, I actually used to do exactly that – write sub-headings as I went – but not recently. Mostly my writing is good, although I need to distinguish in my mind the between blog and essay writing more. I also need to be less subjective when discussing work, especially in the essay writing, and have been given some tips to shift what I say into a more objective position.
I have requested permission to include some of the feedback here but have not yet received an answer. I do find it very useful being able to highlight and underline certain sentences as that process makes the information settle more firmly in my mind.
In the absence of an answer here are some points that stick out for me as important to remember:
- A statement about the difference between iconic and indexal signs has sent me into spin and I am now searching the web to gain a better understanding about this
- A statement following on from the above refers to painting nudes being a product of an artist’s mind whereas a photograph must have a real person in front of the camera – I am confused by this too.
- I could have taken more clues from the processes used about what was being communicated, e.g. discontinuous narrative in Manray’s montage of images and moments making the viewer do the work compared to Rosler’s realtime film made at a time when montage was no longer new and surprising.
- My choice of artists was good but I have been advised to look at the 80s next, which I had planned on doing anyway. I have also come across some interesting current artists which may well be appropriate to include in A2. I shall see how things pan out.
- “Tackle the claims of authors” – I was worried I was being too strident but the example given to me where I didn’t tackle a claim is, in retrospect, a valid point and I shall remember to be even more vigilant!
- I really enjoy writing but find it immensely challenging and tiring, especially when writing about subjects that I am not confident with, or feel a bit murky about. I use writing to work out how I feel and what I think about things. So I am grateful for the advice I was given and hope it will enable me to feel less like I’m desperately trying to pull coherent sentences out of muddy thoughts that occur in my exhausted, slow, old brain.
Image (c)SJField 2015